Wednesday, September 17, 2014

Yellow Brick Fail




For the Five Sentence Fiction Challenge. This weeks word was grief.

Yellow Brick Fail

Each wicked little bird took a piece, peck, peck, pecking away until all that was left was her fleshy container and streaming tears of long heart hurt.
She felt each beak as it tore through the meat of her resolve, her boundaries, her self esteem, her yearning, yet still she walked expecting a buffed up Tin Man to save her.
A serious minded Scarecrow would have been talk therapy company, but none were to be found, nor was there any 'roid rage Lion around to beat the intruders and their reminders of pain into bloody spots on the forest floor.
She had stepped off her yellow brick road in search of...something unseen but felt, only to find herself in a rotten apple forest populated by sorrow grown large by lack of trust and sharing, pecked to pieces by birds named Regret and Loss.
In her head she knew even the Wizard would not be able to give back the Emerald Palace of her dreams, so she trudged on along the crumbling, yellow route in shoes stained dark with shed blood longing.
                                                                 
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6 comments:

  1. Aww that's sad but the words are so image invoking. Nice twist on the original story characters.

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  2. Now I like anything to do with the Yellow Brick Road. Like Alice, Oz is less friendly and cheerful than it looks. It has a dark side. I'm glad you shined a light on it...

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    1. Thank you so much for all your great comments and support! I appreciate it!

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  3. That last sentence makes me want to know everything about this character...

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    1. I think she is sad and lost like we all have been at times. She has forgotten to look up. Maybe she just needs some time in the field of poppies. Thanks, Magaly!

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